I really liked this poem. it was so filled with imagry it was more of a show behind my eyes especially this stanza

" Blood filling every pore,
Blinding pain like never before,
A tortured heart cries in pain,
A penetrating scream of the insane."

that stanza just stood out to me. it conjures such vivid images. all in all it was a powerful poem especially how you ended it.
" Lovely gun, you're so kind,
Tragic end of a Chaotic Mind"

so good work

Rocky

I loved reading this poem, very dark but a great write, thought the last stanza was fantastic especially. 5/5

GREAT POEM!!! the rhyme is great as well as the imagery.. however the flow isnt perfect..some lines are long and then there are some short lines that i feel could use another syllable or two for ex. the first line in the 3rd stanza is a little short

That was excellant!!!! 5/5!!

Very deep... i'd like to get to know you and share some poems or quotes and propably thoughts :)

Holy... snap! this is my absolute favorite of your poems! its amazing!!!!! i really cant get over it! i wish i could write like that, grrrr. it flows really well, and i love the imagery!
great job!!!

Forever*Yours

That was an amazing poem! Really well written. Now i think I have to go read more of them lol.

marcella

Wow very dark. I loved it.. the last stanza was amazing.. You managed to show all the pain, in a truely unique way I might add, and then showed how I person turned to what they did. I loved how you didn't mention what made the person feel the way they did just how they felt at the present moment, very well done. I loved it.

This one is great!! the flow is perfect and the rhymes are spectacular.. and lucky me i read mirrors the same way as you because it rhymed.. :D the emotion was great in this one as well

Wonderful poem. So dark and full of meaningful depth. It was very alluring, and I couldn't stop reading. I was even disappointed such a piece ended. Keep it up!

Wow that was amazing. You expressed the emotions so well. The flow was very good. I loved your use of words; they were very descriptive. You have a lot of talent; I can't wait to read more poems by you. Great job writing this! I was truely impressed!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Wow this was beautifully written it had a great flow and it was a very good poem, 5/5, also i say mirrors like u do so it rhymed just fine for me lol

Omg you have such great talent..i loved this poem...and the word usage in it was great! good job!

Omg this was grand! i loved it nice flow and good words!

Ooh i loved this one, the wording, the flow, everything about it!!! i think its my fave, after footprints hehe

much love and many kisses,
bex

Really good imaginery and wording and i rarely love dark poems,they're priceless but i liked this
Well done
See ya
Laura

I'll admit. This was a great peice of poetry. Very deep...and...very strong use of darkness. Lol. But I"ll admit I did somewhate like it. It was worth reading it even though dark poems are not my thing. But I did like it. Keep up the great work. That you for commenting adn rating my poem. Much Love. God bless 5/5
<3Tayy

I'm SO happy with your comment!!!
If more people were like you there'd be better poets!
It explained everything so clearly you put so much thought to your comments.
NEVER change!
anyway your poem used your vocabulary very well and was easy to understand and read. The sadness was beautifully written yet it didnt break the theme you had choosen.
5.5
I cant comment on love or friendship poems for some reason so im terribly sorry i gave you 5.5 though. The comment would've basically would've been like what I had said ^^^^

GREAT POET!!!!
-Em

I think it's excellent. who cares about mirrors and years.
gosh. you can twist around the words a bit. and poems arent only about writing them...but about presenting.
so if you could present it in a way it's SUPPOSED to sound. wtv.
anyways. on the poem. like i said. excellent. "chaotic mind" is prob one of the main reasons peeps commit suicide. they just cant take it. well penned.

Oh my gosh...this poem was terribly sad...I almost cried reading it...there was so much emotion and pain...wow you are amazing!!