Dead Winter

I really enjoyed this, because I find you write like me. More descriptive and less based on the rhymes. It was well written and I quite enjoyed the concept.

Well Done,
5/5
xPaula.

"I am so numb it hurts,"
That line is either really clever or really dumb. Numb means you can't feel anything, yes? So it can't hurt. It's uncomfortable but it doesn't hurt.
Or.
You want a contradiction in there, however I think you need to word it a little better if that is the case because it doesn't seem to make much sense within the poem, as the poem starts off quite literal, not metaphoric.

"I am alone to face the cold,"
I am left alone to face the cold, maybe?

This goes on a lot, about the cold and fighting. And being alone. That's all the poem is with a few extra things added in. I see the Winter as being a metaphor but the rest of the poem seems so basic.

4/5

jess ~

4/5 once again. Sweety, your poems are usually very strong, but these are getting weaker as I go. they are more like stories, rather then heart felt poems. The flow was off at times too. You're a great poet.
(Just keep doing better)

Wonderful imagery, the word choice was the best, and I like this the most so far. keep up the good work.

Very nice imagery I liked this poem I think the structure needs some work but otherwise nicely done