Mirror Image

Really deep this poem applies to all the people in life who have given up and need something to slap them in that face and say get up and move on with your life.
wow sorry i don't know what just happened to me, well i won't erase it because one day i'll understand what it means. back to your poem loe it really i do it is a great piece and you should be proud:~)Sam

The flow was a little off. But Overall I thought you did a good job.
It was really sad but enjoyable. I love how you explained how she changed but couldn't remember how. Well done.

A unique peice,
Elaine.

The problem with this poem is it's lack of attention towards its syllabication. You need to create a flow... if the poem is choppy, the reader won't find it worthwhile to read. You need to make it look appeasing to the reader.

away little by little. = away, little by little (otherwise, it would seem like a run-on)

gotten really strange = strange? I don't think strange is quite the word that you are looking for.

Interesting end... Kind of a unique ending for the cliche topic. I still think that had you made your poem smoother, you could have worked on the syllabication, and it could have primped up your poem a little bit... but other than that well done.

5/5
~Stephen White

Great.. 5/5 definately...
loooove it.
you should read & comment some of mine sometime.. :D
<3 amanda

Unoriginal, but better than a lot of poems I've read written on this topic.

I think the structure would be better like this ;

[She looks in the mirror and doesn't recognize who's staring back,
Her eyes have gone dark, some say they've turned black.

Her face has changed, it's really gone pale,
She hears what they say, but the comments have gone stale.

She's stopped eating, she's thinner than a stick,
Everyone she knows says she always looks sick.

She doesn't realize her wrists are scarred,
She can't remember cutting them up with a glass shard.

Even she can tell her personalities gone brittle,
She's fading away little by little.

She looks in the mirror and realizes she's gotten really strange,
She's looking in this mirror and realizes she's never going to change. ]

It makes it easier to read. =]