Shattered Dreams

Omg...this is so true!!! i can feel the pain in it! i love ot 5/5

xoxo kisses

Oh wow....
This was so0o beautiful!
I liked the flow of this, I thought it was perfect, and I enjoyed the wording and imagery.

Full of such confusion, but I like that for this poem. It's saying a lot in such short stanzas. I had one suggestion

Shattered dreams
And broken lies,
Dazed looks,
Badly covered eyes.

The last line in this stanza doesn't flow as well with the rest of the poem, but I do like the thoughts in this stanza the most. I think it was good and to the point. Nice job!
Charisma*

Wow. amazing job. this was by far the best poem in the contest. you did such an amazing job. You look gorgeous,
When you cry,
that line is amazing. idk why but i love it. great job

Wow that is so good.. great rhyming and a smoothe flow.. i loved every single stanza in that poem, but my favourite 2 had 2 be "Bruised lips
And much to share,
River of veins
And broken prayer."

..and.. "You look gorgeous,
When you cry,
Dazed with hate
And much to despise. "
.. i like how you repeated this stanza at the end, repeating it made it such a strong ending. Well done 5/5, that poem was so gripping :)