Memories of us

I thought what we had could only be fiction
but you proved it was reality
you are my sweet addiction
and i cant let you go

I really like how you begin this poem... "you are my sweet addiction" - this is so lovely...
I find also good your comparison between fiction and reality...

I miss you so much
when we were together
all that was in focus to me was you
i wanted it to last forever
i'm sorry i made you wait
it wasnt fair to you
now i know my fait
which is to be missin you

This stanza is also very sweet... I can really relate to it :) Sometimes it seems like all the time in the world isn't enough...
A question, though: "fait"? shouldn't it be "fate"? or you mean something else?

i am glad you never gave up on me
you wouldnt let me go
now its my turn
to be the one to show
how much you mean to me

This is so simple yet so incredibly romantic... I absolutely adore it...
(yet you ought to capitalize the "I" s...)

i would give up anything
for just one day with you
i dont deserve your love
and i dont think i ever could
but i wont give up
cuz you never would

Powerful and filled with emotions... I cannot believe this was the first poem you posted...
("won't" instead of "wont" and so on... it seems like you had to type it fast... :) )

that last day with you
i couldn't describe with a million words
seeing you waiting outside my cabin at 6 am
just to say good morning and how have you been?
those last moments together
were the best
you showed me your love with a kiss
that left me breathless

Now your poetry leaves me breathless... This is so gorgeous...
The flow could be a little bit off in the last two lines, but i am not quite sure... Maybe you could read it out and check?

i have to try to forget
all the memories we made
and all the words you said
because it hurts to much
to know what we had
i can never have again.....

A good written twist... Quite sad, though...

Altogether:

A wonderful poem... Really well written... (maybe you ought to check your typing a little bit, yet no trouble ;) )

5/5

*isabel*

Its amazing how different your poems have gotten since we met
5/5 babe

Great job 5/5* keep up the good work

This is my favorite poem
ever read it has alot of emotion

I have to try to forget
all the memories we made
and all the words you said
because it hurts to much
to know what we had
i can never have again.....

^wow those lines were filled with emotion, just like the other stanzas.. youre great at this, 5/5 and thank you for the comments!