Death

The emotion and heart were very thought out. I liked the flow.. that you did.. and the depth you chose. Nice work.

I luv dis poem!!i feel that way lot!!!keep writing!!!!

Well well, what to say about this. I liked the idea behind the pome, but your use of slang and not using puncuation made you, and your poem seem unintelligent. You had beautiful rhymes and most of the lines fit together perfectly, but as I said, if you try capitalizing the letters at the beginning of the line, adding punctuation, and spelling the words out proporly, it will do that much more for this piece of work.

--Steph

Thank you

I really like this poem, especially the lines:
so i gotta stand tall,
more i think,
more i shrink
creates such a lasting impression, well done.