Too sad for words. you have a great imagination writing something like this so eloquently. sad yet perfectly written. you tell a compelling tale x

The storyy is soo sadd! it made me cry.. all those years the mother had hope that one day her daughter will come back to her.. but the mother never knew that the daughter was dead! i loved the poem.. it's got a great message!
keep up the wonderful work..
take care..
luv,,
haya 3gab =]

Aww, this was so sad. I liked some part of it, but in others, your rhymes seemed forced and didn't flow very well, maybe if you didn't use slang such as "cops" and "pic" it would make it sound more professional. I absolutely loved the stroy though, it just could have been written better.

--Steph

Wow, every mothers fear. very detailed and powerful, interesting turns

Wait, so the daughter's boyfriend was the mother's rapist? and did he kill the girl? I mean, was the daughter the girl on the roof? Wow, that is sad..

That really was a beautiful poem .sad but damn good. quite long but a joy to read and once its started i just had to finish it. good work

I was totally mesmorized by your poem and had to read it all the way through. great job! i loved the flow and disagree with tainted beauty...i think the "slang" added to the poem. keep up the great work!

Wow..this poem is so full of emotion. It's truly heartbreaking. I wanted to cry after reading it. You've done such a great job, can't wait to read more. Keep up the good work. =]

~Devils ll Play~

Wow so many emotions