First time..redone :S

by XfromwithinX   Jan 27, 2007


Like the first blossom on a tree,
you were the first flower in my heart, it's first plea.
The first time you held my hand,
it was like a lambs first bleat, in a golden covered land.
Like a cool breeze on a hot summers day,
you were the first and only person I trusted with my life, I trusted you would stay.
But just like spring,
we didn't last and my heart can no longer sing.

i wasn't happy with the first one :) so i have done it so it rhymes :D

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  • 17 years ago

    by Cherish

    Yay another brilliant poem...look laura im not having this im fed up with you making me look bad :( xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by CY GINDLE

    Good stuff muchy but it urs and that
    means i love it

  • 17 years ago

    by emptysole

    Hmmm i know you dont like the first one but i think i like it better sorry i dont mean to be rude :-]

  • 17 years ago

    by Al

    This poem is so awesome, you know what your awesome, and everything you do is awesome...lol, keep writting the way your write hone...xxx

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