January On The Lake (Double Haiku)

by debbylyn   Jan 28, 2007


The lake's churning foam
Crashes on icicle rocks
Winter's chilly home

January sky
Sinks in the icy water
A hungry gull flies

*written for a contest

a Haiku (also called nature or seasonal haiku) is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5) or 17 syllables in all. Haiku is usually written in the present tense and focuses on nature (seasons).

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Once again....so visually effective....and a real pleasure because the syllables really are correct....Sometimes I have written haikus about 'human' nature...and it's seasons...but then....I'm a Gramma...we can take a few liberties;-)....

    This is beautiful work.

  • 17 years ago

    by Moon Princess

    Cool. :D plz read my only nature poem. lol.

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    Nicely written
    I find it quite hard to write a good simple haiku that has so much meaning, but you pulled it off excellently
    5/5
    *Gem*

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren

    I thought it was good coz you don't see many Haiku poems on here and its cool 2 hav sumthing different

  • 17 years ago

    by Never URs

    I love this poem! great flow! plz comment on mine :)

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