Wow.. spectacular poem.. great rhyme and flow.. i love how it tells a story.. really great job!

I agree this one is really good

This is amazing, it flows well, and i love the story... i hope it's not true though... if it is, im truly sorry... if it's not, wow, ur a great writer!! great job with this, it's one of my favorites! 5/5!

Forever*Yours

Wow...This really got me. It is amazing!! Drinking is a slow death. I wish no one would do it!! I love the story also!! 5/5

~Shae

So great to get back to reading your poems. this is great!

the way it is set out. perfect. short but amazing just how it is.

5/5 david

Sad depressing, and a great story, rather good flow 4.6/5 so basicly 5/5

This poem was ok. I've read too many poems alike this to say it's amazing. But, yeah, the story is sad and depressing but too much a cliche. The flow was decent tough.

Keep it up.

-Kenneth G. @ Faceless Mirror

Its very dramatic. I like that concept, a lot. But there were things in this poem that made it...sort of incomplete. You described why she was feeling that way but I just didnt feel it.

4/5 for the very good concept

thanks.

It was a really good poem, I liked the rhyme scheme and a lot of people can relate to this. I mean, you can do a reverse role, and a guy could definitely feel the same way. Or maybe just me, I don't know.. lol, really good stuff though.

This is indeed very heartbreaking and i could even get a message from this one...hope people understand it.

great write dear

all the best and take care

Awh this is sad.=[

This was a good poem. however, i have to say that the ending kind of left me hanging. i felt as though you could have put in a few more verses before you ended it. it was a great story, filled with great angst.

Wow this poem was great it had so much emotion it had me from begining to end i loved it 5/5

Great write! i especially loved the rhyme scheme nice job!

5/5 from me

What a sad and emotional poem! What a tradgedy to lose the one you love that way... I hope that everything is okay (if this really happened) Thanks for the comment! =]

Ciao

Wow I must say very good job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! plz check out some of my poems I would love to see if u like them

Wow, very strong... what made u want to write this poem

Great job hun,very heart breaking!!! great flow and got a clear message across 5/5

Again, this was so sad. I need to read a happy poem, but you really make these sad ones so emotional, and so powerful.
love Tara-Kay
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Oh, wow. This was a really good poem. It's sad, but beautiful. My only suggestion is that you don't use "life" so much.

"she hung up the phone,
and tears filled her eyes.
now she's all alone,
because that night he lost his life."

^^ those are my favourite lines. They mold the piece together, if that makes any sense.

Wonderful job.

5/5

-Briana