She'd Ask

by Christie   Feb 13, 2007


Slow resonant notes gleam in brimming eyes,
Watching as within her heart promptly dies,
Shutting down to feelings, as he blankly stares,
Despondently she wonders if he even cares.

so thats it then? he mutters without finality,
A stare too blank to be realizing reality,
A single tear answered more than his question,
As if finalizing the mere suggestion.

A silence, he stared directly ahead,
Seeming not to understand what had been said,
The chiming bells abhorrently loud,
The sound of her tears, the only other sound.

Slowly standing, nothing else to say,
One look back and she walked away.
Wait! he cried, the first sign of emotion,
The look on his face showing utter devotion.

Three months later, no idea how he feels,
Just wanting a hug so her heart can heal,
Not any hug, but one from only that guy,
Shed ask, if only she wasn't so shy.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Topshop princess

    One of those poems that makes you just want to say 'awwwh' out loud. Loved it.
    The flow && rhyme really worked. Good job 5/5 x

  • 17 years ago

    by NashvilleBlues

    I loved this poem of yours. It was great....that's all I've really got to say.... amazing.

  • 17 years ago

    by Krazy

    I thought it was a really good composition. there was just enough rhyme to keep it flowing. nice job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Tiller

    Wow! Great poem! I liked it. Well, again I agree with A Fallen Angel, and I say that because I could never really put why I like the poem when I comment. I'm bad at it. Lol. Keep writing though, you're great it.

  • 17 years ago

    by A Fallen Angel

    This poem is rich in word usage and i loved some specific lines such as:
    "Slow resonant notes gleam in brimming eyes,
    Watching as within her heart promptly dies,"
    AND
    "The sound of her tears, the only other sound."

    those lines are so put together that its just amazing... i love it... i also liked the end part where you said u would have asked for a hug had u not been so shy... it reminded me of myself a few yrs back where if a guy even looked at me i would turn red... lol.

    great poem again Christie... u have a wonderful way of expressing yourself through your poems...

    hope to see more...

    A.

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