Sweat The Battle Before The Battle Sweats You

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Feb 13, 2007


Split the image of burning fascades and utter disgust,
Hold your head high with attempt and dripping trust,
Becareful in the field of dying truth and lust,
Whisper words around that need to be discussed.

Like a forgotten prize, clutch pity to your side,
Multicolored mask that you cannot hide,
A few million eyes peer in glancing at your lies;
Swords and battles take time to collide.

You're your own failure, despising w|h|o|r|e,
There's nothing you can do, much like before,
Drop your guns, get out into the battle and gore,
Fall to the ground, crawl around and explore.

Sweat this battle, before it sweats you,
Dance with the dead bodies, discover a new hue
Move faster, work harder, and bid adieu
Turn what you know into more than you can chew.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Cherise

    OMG :| this poem blew me away , this was amazing! there nothing i don't love about it, i love the story line, I love poems like these, great job. Keep writing, your really good at it! i'm gonna check out more of your work :)

    5/5 :)

  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    This is e f f i n' amazing, hun. I love the meaning & comparison of it. The imagery deffinitley just.. blew me away!

    Amazing flow. Your vocabulary was very strong & powerful.

    Great job, Hun.

    Bri x

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This...was frikken amazing!
    The way you compared life to a battle field was wonderfully done, and the imagery in this blew me away.
    The flow was flawless, and the whole poem is just..perfect.

  • 17 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    An absolute amazing poem,well written.
    Seems to be aimed at someone or THING. Very vivid but very good

  • 17 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    I didn't get at all where you were trying to get at all here. I'm sorry. But personally I'd try to tell people what you really want them to see. The flow was pretty good. And the words were really good. So I give you credit for that.

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