Man, you hit me deep to the core with this poem.

your servant:
david

This poem...MAGNIFICENT! You have amazing talent!!!!!

I somewhat agree, that when you're asleep you forget reality, but as soon as you wake it hits you with a big thud. I guess that's why when I went through a depressive stage a couple of years back, all I did was sleep.
Anyway I digress, interesting write. I'm sure many will relate. Thanks for sharing.

Beautiful... great write... great flow and words 5/5

This poem was great and it had wonderful flow i enjoyed reading it keep it up 5/5

This is another excellent poem of yours. I know there are some people out there that you think are your friends then they just turn their backs on you in your toughest times. The ryming wat great.

Kaleee

This was just beautiful.
Kind of sad but still such a wonderful read.
The flow was flawless and the imagery and wording you used were breathtaking.
I enjoyed the rhyme scheme, nothing seemed forced.
Wonderful work.

Once again excellent!
i love dreams, everything goes your way for those few minutes, where we're doing nothing!
yet your poem is sooo true! you come to realize, all that...
5/5

That was awesome. the flow was supurb.
much love and many kisses,
bex

Isn't a pitty that just sleep, can cause great harm. Again you have written a masterpeice. I relly love your work. You have a way with words that i just can't help but wanting to read. I hope that made sense. Amazing flow, wonderful vivid word choice, and great display of emtions. Excellent 5/5

That was brilliant...depressing but truthful.I loved it,I could totally relate to it...even the title was perfect(title are hard for me to make..haha)Love this piece...keep it up!