Distance

by Renee   Feb 15, 2007


A swirl in darkness
it grows
a baby cries

dissolve

theres a blur
of mountain tops
with their glistening beauty

fade away

she would be gazing
at the sunset
through the window

darkness

an old woman
telling a story
by firelight

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  • 14 years ago

    by Nowhere Man

    Love it... I like reading short poems that makes me really think like this one... keep it comin... 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Kenzi

    Beautiful dear, utterly ahmazing.

  • 15 years ago

    by Dan Bloom

    Love it! haha 5/5

    hmmm... change the last stanza and youre good!

    An old woman
    telling a story
    by firelight

    Instead of

    An old woman telling
    a story by firelight

    It just makes it look more pretty haha and my OCD hurts me on that. Love it though... i cant ever write poetry in this form. I lose focus! Great work

  • 16 years ago

    by MissMeg

    O i'm adding it to my favorites.
    keep it up
    i loved it
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by YourThe ReasonIDiedTonight

    Short but well written...please keep writing and I will keep reading 5/5

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