Very nicely done! It seemed you didn't keep a pattern towards the end I started to catch some rhyming, try and keep the same pattern and if the majority of the poem doesn't rhyme, keep the enire poem like that unless you're doing a pattern of one stanza rhyming and the other non rhyming. Overall very well done! 5/5
Hey, i have to say i really liked your metaphor you used, describing love as locket. This was a great idea, and you did a wonderful job doing it. The emotion was wonderful and the flow was ok. The neding was great and concluded the poem wonderfully. I was quite drawn into the poem from the begining. An excellent read, keep it up and thanks for your comment! xx
but about my poem....the homeward bound thing meant that some of the guests were going home...haha idk it just ryhmed haha....and the hay thing was like what the hay like what the heck you know haha....but thanks for the comment Ill make sure to make things clearer next time....comment back?!