Comments : A Locket of Lies

  • 13 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow,i loved the flow, and the emotion, keep writing! i luvd it!
    luv gabriella

  • 13 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    Wow, non-rhyming isnt usually my type but i loved this, it was so perfect in its unperfection..beautiful flow:)

  • 13 years ago

    by amoxi

    I liked this poem a lot it showed a lot of emotion ur a great writer keep it up

  • 13 years ago

    by robin milford

    Wow wow wow 5/5 this poem is breath takeing I enjoyed reading it

  • 13 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Sometimes if we hold onto things for to long, they end up holding us back - so it may be best to just let go - amazing write 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Very nicely done! It seemed you didn't keep a pattern towards the end I started to catch some rhyming, try and keep the same pattern and if the majority of the poem doesn't rhyme, keep the enire poem like that unless you're doing a pattern of one stanza rhyming and the other non rhyming. Overall very well done! 5/5
    God bless

    <3Tayyy

  • That was very sad 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Another very nice poem!
    uhh... loved how you ended the poem!

    "The girl can now breathe,
    and she tosses this love away."

    found that part powerful... :)

    keep it up!

  • 13 years ago

    by Yuna

    This was a very powerful poem. Very good job! The locket can be painful... Keep writing!

  • 13 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    I would love to know who down rates!!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by SomeRomanticGuy

    Definitely a great job, good wording and great idea. nice job 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Hey, i have to say i really liked your metaphor you used, describing love as locket. This was a great idea, and you did a wonderful job doing it. The emotion was wonderful and the flow was ok. The neding was great and concluded the poem wonderfully. I was quite drawn into the poem from the begining. An excellent read, keep it up and thanks for your comment! xx

  • 13 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    I liked the metaphor in this as well. Hey, and I wear that type of locket.
    Great job.

  • 13 years ago

    by Sara

    I enjoyed this...5/5

    but about my poem....the homeward bound thing meant that some of the guests were going home...haha idk it just ryhmed haha....and the hay thing was like what the hay like what the heck you know haha....but thanks for the comment Ill make sure to make things clearer next time....comment back?!

  • 13 years ago

    by Michael Jones

    This poem was really good I like this one alot! YYOU HAVE WHAT IT TAKES

  • 13 years ago

    by Kaila

    It was alright I wished it woulda rhymed more but its alright 4/5

  • 13 years ago

    by KemistryKia

    I liked it

  • 13 years ago

    by MelindaJoy

    Wow, deep meaningful. Very nice, I can relate to this, some people have to let go to be able to be themselves and more, very nicly written I enjoyed it and look forward to reading more

  • 13 years ago

    by kimara4955

    I really enjoyed this poem, u have talent keep it up, 5/5 i liked the way u expressd it by using to key as a locket very powerful. xxtake carexx

  • 13 years ago

    by Delie

    Wow really nice poem!
    love how the locket symbolizes the past love...:D
    great job