1st verse of a poem [let me know what you reckon]

by Nats   Feb 20, 2007


He promised to love me forever
"Until the stars burn out," he said.
Well I guess the stars must be gone now
For the love he once felt is dead.

Yeah.... that's all i've got so far.... not too sure how to continue with it, comment it and let me know what you think please!! also, if you have any ideas on how to continue it, let me know!!

nats xx

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  • 17 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    I think its really good but if you can't get with the flw hy don't you open the poem in a different way. you can use that in a later verse? Would that be easier in any way. I so that sometimes and it helps. It's gr8 tho. x

  • 17 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    I think its really good but if you can't get with the flw hy don't you open the poem in a different way. you can use that in a later verse? Would that be easier in any way. I so that sometimes and it helps. It's gr8 tho. x

  • 17 years ago

    by Kenneth

    This is a good begining.. if you get stuck start a new one that is what i do..and if you think of somthing then add it.. that is what i do.. its good to experiment =D

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