The Big Black Hole

Yuna,
I agree with what Vanilla said. I like how it was depressing at the beginning, talking about falling deeper into a dark hole, but then turns to the thought of hope and a shinning light. With all your pieces, I notice that you usually do a great job in keeping the stanza's a good length (And close to the same size), so I want to say great job for that ^_^! It really makes a poem flow when the lines are the same length.
I think that the first stanza is my favorite though:

It feels like I am falling
deeper in this hole
the same one I created
the one as black as coal.

The line, "The same one I created," really caught my eye.
That basically covers it all, so keep it up, 5/5!!

With all due respect,
Hatori

Wow!, great flow, great rhimeing, EXCELLENT poem this is awesome,
I love it deffinateally a 5/5,
i like how it's short and dirrect,
Keep up the great work!

I was thinking about the same thing, and when I read your poems Kevin, I found that my poems are kinda like yours...

Sorry, I just had to smile. The style here is exactly the same as mine: Nice flowing words that just roll off the tongue. :)