Taste of Sins

Your he's don't make any sense! Maybe that is the way you wanted it but:

In the world lives he worst

It's not making sense .. how about

In the world he lives the worst

Or something.. maybe thats the style you were going for idk.. but none of them make a lot of sense.

Other than that .. you did a really great job. Just fix them 'he's' and your good to go.

I really like this part though:

On mercy would he plead
None of pleads be in heed
Taste of sins he would see
Forbidden and forgotten he would be.

Great Job

5/5

Wow. it was unbelievable. it was so true and you expressed it so well. i loved the way you created such a strong image in my mind. great work. 5/5

On mercy would he plead
None of pleads be in heed
Taste of sins he would see
Forbidden and forgotten he would be.

my absolute fave lines^^

It rhymes well dear. It is a very true poem.

Yes we are to face and taste the consequences if we commit sins.