Dark Blue

by dollwithafrown   Mar 6, 2007


Your soul's a burning shade of dark blue
The darkness inside it echoes consistently
Behind it lies hidden secrets and desires
Which I'm dying to discover, persistently

Your soul's a burning shade of dark blue
It creates a sombre omen floating in air
Yet your face is made of stone, no emotion at all
When we are together, you just do not care

Your soul's a burning shade of dark blue
A solid tomb of unseen abilities
Wanting to discover all that is out there with you
However, I am met with never-ending hostilities

Your soul's a burning shade of dark blue
Swollen, almost nearly completely closed
You walk around as if you are a human secret
Never risking your chances of being exposed

Your soul's a burning shade of dark blue
But guess what, you're not alone
I, too, walk myself in this shallow hole
Never letting the real me be shown

Your soul's a burning shade of dark blue
And mine is exactly the same
So together we'll conquer the world outside
The same dark soul, the same new aim

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  • 16 years ago

    by WrittenInTheStars

    It's very well worded. I really like the repetative opening lines.

  • 16 years ago

    by xXMohawkedMahemXx

    An amazing poem...

    Brilliant... =]

    5/5
    .:Hammy:.
    xx

  • 16 years ago

    by pookiengurgi

    I love the variety of words,and ure understanding of this type of person...who hides themself because their misunderstood or wtvr why...you're really talented,I like your work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    Dark Blue is the name of a Jack's Mannequin song, but i like this much better. xD Brilliant wording, brilliant imagery, brilliant form. Bloody brilliant.

  • 16 years ago

    by Synh

    In the 2nd line of the first stanza, 'constently' should be 'constantly'. It would've been better if you used punctuation but i really have no room to talk because i don't use punctuation either lol.

    In your 3rd stanza, the flow seemed a bit off because the 2nd line was too short compared to the other 3. Also, the rhyming seemed a little forced in lines 2 and 4 of that stanza.

    'almost nearly completely'
    ^That was kind of a weird line.

    It wasn't bad but I've read better poems from you. There were many instances when the rhyming seemed force, as did your wording. It was alright.

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