She's Everything

Loved the poem. It was well written and meaningful!! 5/5 :)

This was good, the flow was flawless, and an interesting point of view. strong ending and even stronger emotion coming through. great write. 5/5

Awwe . such a lovely poem
I wanted to be your fantasy,
And guide you through life happily
But then you turned and my flame died,
i loved these lines alot. maybe these lines relates to me. you words have great power. and these are expressed good.
take care 5/5

This is a really good poem. I really like the part,
"She's everything and I am pained
To hear her whisper your sweet name.
I wanted to visit our special place
And fall in love inside your grace,"
especially the last line. I can really relate to that.
keep writing
peace
soffe

I loved this poem, it is really great. I love this stanza:

I wanted to be your fantasy,
And guide you through life happily
But then you turned and my flame died,
And now I know I barely tried.
She's everything and I am pained
To hear her whisper your sweet name.

Excellent job! I liked how it rhymed too. 5++/5

~Lizzie~