Comments : Too Young

  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    That's very very sad about your cousin. Great poem, I liked the repetitive lines, it added power to the poem

  • 17 years ago

    by azii

    So beautiful and sad. You really have lots of talent! You're on my favs now ! :)) You wrote that you'll comment back with 5, so will you please? :) But for me, 3 is enough.. :)

    Best of wishes and take care

  • 17 years ago

    by Xx Eternal Fantasy xX

    Wonderful poem. I loved it. It was sad and I loved the way you showed the emotion and feelings for your cousin. Keep it up 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    This poem was so sad, yet so beautiful. You asked me to tell you how to make this better, but I really don't have an answer for you. I can't say it's brilliant, or that it's the best poetry I've read. But from reading what you wrote, I can see it came straight from your heart, and I think you should keep it how it is. You knew your cousin, and these are YOUR words to her. Don't let anybody change that. :)

    I'm very sorry for your loss.

  • 16 years ago

    by krystal powell

    I loved your poem.and im sorry to here about you cousin.its is so sad.i never lost somebody i who was close to.

  • 16 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    This was such a sad poem and the meaning behind it was more sadder, if that is a word lol. It flowed prefectly, great rhythm. Keep it up! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Julienne

    Wow. wow. wow. awesome, touching, moving, just totally amazing, i could almost reach out and touch your pain, the way you wrote it almost made it all tangible, you are really good at showing your pain and putting the message across to the audience. thank you for posting this awes poem, and thank you for commenting my poems, i value your feedback... xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    This is extremely sad. I am so sorry that you and your entire had to go through something like this its a very hard thing to do especially when there isnt really anything you can do to make things better except spend time with her in the end etc. The idea I really loved but the flow was a little bit off, I think that if you lengthen the lines or add some more poetic devices into it, it would be much better. Nice work.

  • 16 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    This is so sad i had tears in my eyes while reading it. i know how you feel though my aunt has cancer and its so hard. i will pray for you and your family.

    this flowed great and had good rhyme. so much emotion in this. i give this a 5/5 because its just that good.

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This poem was beautifully sad, I say beautiful because of the tribute and meaning that was portrayed in this poem was well written and im sure worthwhile. Sad because of your loss. This whole poem be amazing the flow outstanding and the word choice just great.Well done with this ~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    Thats so sad! I'm sorry for your loss...definitely nicely written poem though! 5/5 from me!

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    This was a very great poem. The greatest thing about the whole thing was the tribute to some one you were very fond of. Great Job I know she would be very proud. Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Beautiful poem dear...so sad...m sory for your loss.but she must be very proud of you...very good work!!.....great flow and perfect rhymes..kp it up!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    I'm so sorry for your loss!
    Very beautiful poem and very touching.. Nice flow and emotion is strong.
    Like you said she is in better place now. And it ended her pain. Again im very sorry. I'm sure she is proud of you.
    Amazing poem. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    5/5 excellent poem. its very touching.. im sorry to hear about your cousin.

    Your poem, however, was beautifully written. It was calm and sad, but heart warming that you say shes in a better place and not really alone.

  • This is great work i'm sorry to hear about your cousin. i wrote a poem call broken inside about my grandmother who passed away. but great work. if you want to talk sometime i'm here.5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melinda

    Lindsay must've been very speacial to you. i admire that kind of love. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle

    Awww..God Bless her, you and her family. Keep your head high. Must be hard on you.

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