Please help me

by firexdancer   Mar 25, 2007


Im on my knees,
please just listen for a moment,
it won't take long,
just hear my plea.
im so lonely,
but how can you long for something you've never had?
please help me.
even as you see my tears
my screams you turn away,
you smile at my cries,
when all i did was pray.
im scared of what you have become,
but your the only one who can see
the person who i used to be
the person who was me
if you can hear my voice
please listen for a moment
all i needed was a friend
someone who could hold me in the darkness.

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  • 17 years ago

    by SmileeItsBritt

    Another well written poem, private message me if you ever need someone to talk to hun!

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Good poem. I think it would have read better if it was actually structured, but I still liked it. A strong feeling of sadness and desperation was conveyed.

    Some words of advice: always remember to capitalise when you're writing 'I'. And don't forget apostrophes when needed!

    Nice job.

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    I can relate to this soo much tht it almost made me cry...yea...i dont think i can put a smily face cuz this relates to me and this is how i feel...u just made a perfect poem well in my eyes. from my point of view...awsomers! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by David

    I loved the first line the most. but i added, plz help me to it. so it was plz help me, im on my knees

    well done. i loved this. sad yet very well done.

    5/5 David

  • 17 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is a good poem, you have a good talent here so keep writing. take kare xxxxx

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