Comments : Forshadowing a life

  • 13 years ago

    by Katie

    This is such a strong poem. So much meaning. I love it. Great work. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    I enjoyed reading this poem. it has a great flow, and it was soft. the only error i found was a typo: to let me heart cry out and speak [to let M heart cry and speak]

    5/5.

  • I liked this poem. The flow was excellent and the word choice was good.
    Good job 5/5

    :Sarah:

  • 13 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    This was really good I liked the flow. And I really loved the last line, beautiful write.

  • 13 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I liked this one so much I read it like 3 times. I know how it feels to be alone and have so much that you want to say or get off your chest - but who do you tell it to? Amazing write stay strong 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This poem had really beautiful word choice. i loved how they werent just plain words but they ment so much. The emotion was great. Definitly a good read. 5/5
    ~mel

  • 13 years ago

    by Boy

    Very well ending. good flow of words. your work is great. itwas sad too. 5/5 take care

  • 13 years ago

    by Cherise

    Great poem, i like how you have it set up. It tells a sad story, but it's good, i really enjoyed reading it :)

  • 13 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Very good. I liked this poem because it's how I've been feeling lately. The first and the last stanza was breathtaking and moving.

  • 13 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Like always your poems are such a unique and great read..........
    you are such a great writer and im so thankful to your poems as they are giving me a fresh read of poetry. keep it up

  • 13 years ago

    by beav

    Overall a very good write. the concept is different, which is refreshing. good imagery. easy to visualize. some poems give me a color-feel, if that makes sense. this one was gray. the third stanza didn't seem to fit as well as the others. the rhythm seemed off. the rest of it flowed well. and who am i to tell anyone anything!! excellent. 5 for you. glad i stopped to read. -beav

  • 13 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Wow, this was beautiful. I absolutely loved the third stanza, your use of visual imagery blew me away. I liked the division of this poem and the words you used really captured your feeling of loneliness. You certainly have a talent for this, great work.

    --Steph

  • 13 years ago

    by Kaila

    What a wonderful write there was so much emotion you did a fantastic job

  • 13 years ago

    by Deana

    It was like watching a scene unfold in a eerie movie,I thought the use of words like opaque really brought home the surreal quality of the write.well done!

  • 13 years ago

    by Poeta

    How beautiful. The imagery was unbelievable; you're such an amazing writer. You really brought this poem to life with great word choice and flow. 5/5

    Heartz!

  • 13 years ago

    by bon

    Good use of vocab and a srtong poem with a nice flow. I thought it was good that the flow was the way it is, although it could have been better, it allowed the meaning to come out more. Great job. =D

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Gooberz

    Buetifully written i especially like the 3rd stanza....5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Fr0g PrincE

    Beautiful piece... we almost have the same type of imagery... but for me You're the WINNER.. yeah.. keep up the Good work!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by Anonymous

    I like it! i hope you overcome this demon! (not real demon, but you know). Reminds me of autumn nights with a half moon and leaves blowing around everywhere. great imagery.