Your Life, Your Hands (Sonnet)

I don't like third stanza it somehow doesn't fit but rest of this poem is excellent. Ending is very effective and few lines are really greatly written. I like the topic and this piece has some interesting, original rhythm. Rhyming is good except in last two lines,
you-true is very typical rhyme and it doesn't leaves good impression in your poem.
Anyway I like this one very much, you created great atmosphere in it and expressed your attitude clearly.

Thank you sir for thie enjoyable read. Keep up the great talent

I love that it was subtle.
I didn't understand anything
Until I read the title
Then it all clicked like Shuh-bang. Lol.
It was very well.
The flow was nice, but not great.
But all in all.
I'll give you a four :]

The person you really need the most is you

I wish more people could get to read this. most of us may know it already. but we keep forgetting it every once in a while. that's sad :(

Great line Darien! :)
Marjan

OoOoOo!!! I loved the originality in this poem you give so many examples and make the person really see what your poem is about I liked it!