Amazing job!
Love it! 5/5
Very touching, and full of emotion.
The rhyming is great, too!
Keep it up!

Take care

This poem is very well written and the meaning behind it is great. Funny how time passes by so quick, especially when we look back on past memories. Excellent job 5/5

Good job laura awesome imagery,
your ever loving gaurdian
Shadowe Souza

This is one beautiful poem! I love the use of your words and imagery you used! Well done! I could not find any mistakes whatsoever in this poem. Keep it up!
God Bless 5/5
<3Tayyy

Your imagery is perfect. Rhyming is pretty good. And your last stanza... speechless. By far, the last stanza is the best part of the poem. The perfect ending. Nicely done 5/5

Comment #2

A breath taking piece...

"Snow uses a white paint on all the street
Cold tickles your skin,feeling no discreet
A violet loses his love under that heaviness
Lie to me but don't ever lose me my sweetness"

That stanza was one of the best in my opinion, using the snow as a metaphor for paint was ingenius!
And once again, the repetition helped to get the meanings across without being overbearing
Excellent
5/5
*Gem*

I loved it. The flow was excellent and the rhyming wasn't forced.
You are a talented writer.
Beautiful write. 5/5

|Sarah|

Lie to me but don't let me fade my only happiness
^ i absaloutly love that line

i love this poem

beautiful

brittany(MD)

Another extremely good poem. I like the imagery you use in it and the fifth stanza is very good. I enjoyed reading it and as such it deserves a 5/5 ^_^

Awww wow! this was so beautiful! so unique, i love the way you kept reapeating the words 'lie to me but...' i lovd it!
nuff luv x

Great poem and very well written...5/5 keep it up.

Amazingly written, I love the depth and meaning behind it all. everything flows together so good! 5/5 Keep it up!

This seems like a better 'love' poem than the other two I read. The flow was better, not quite great, but a lot better. The lines made more sense and the rhymes were ok. You try way too hard to write rhyming poems, and I really think you should try free verse. Rhyming poetry isn't all the special. Good stuff though.

One word- WOW.
this was very good.
Love it!

This was a gracefully written poem and you described everything very well. The repitition of the title worked well and it showed your devotion to this person. Great job
cheers, josh

It's hard to explain how well this poem was written.. It was absolutly amazing.. I loved it and I can still here the words playing over and over in my head.. You've penned and excellent peice, the words are entirely impossible for my mind to forget.
Very much captivating,
Splendid Job Laura..

Elainex

From reading a lot of your work I find a re ocurring style you often repeat the last line in every stanza this creates alot of effect and when combined with the rhyming it really dose give it a sense of your style. I belive if I were to have read this with out knowing you write it I may have been able to guess.

Excellent poem. Amazing imagery in this write. Very detailed. The flow was consistent and the rhyming was not forced. It had an awsome ending as well.

-Shannon <3

I really enjoyed this piece. I thought that the flow was really good. I also think that it was full of depth and emotion

Really good..full of metaphors and I like how you used nature in each stanza because we experience it every day, week, month, and year...good right..though I didn't expect the end. Keep up the good work.