Walking on the wind

by MyDevotion   Apr 12, 2007


Walking in the rain
Eye's bloodshot, full of strain
Feeling down and dry
Needing nourishment from the sky,

You weren't there
When I needed your care
The most I received
Was a sorrowful reprieve,

I'll hold you tight, was said
Rest down your weary head
Stab in the back, don't turn around
Please rest my body, softly in the ground,

Yet lit on fire, I was not found
Ashes blew, from my half burnt mound
Concealed away, to this day
Leaving my soul, stuck in dismay,

Now I float upon the breeze
Pushing you down, upon your knees
Don't try to talk back, you'll hear my voice
From now on, you won't have a choice.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Tammie

    This is really unique, I thought. We all have those people that stab us in the back, you wrote about it well. The rhyming was well written, the vocab was appropriate for the poem and made great imagery. You are great at that. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 17 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Very nice poem! The ending was strong like you said. Well, You did a good job!. God Bless 5/5
    <3Tayyy

  • 17 years ago

    by Nikki

    I likedd itt
    keep up the gret worrkk!!=))))

  • 17 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    wow amazing, I absolutely love the last stanza =) the rhyming is done very well, I like the words you used in the poem.
    great work 5/5
    kisses stephanie