God, Do You Have Faith In Me?

by BECLiKEW0AHH   Apr 14, 2007


There once was a girl
Who suffered within.
Her life was a mess,
She was living in sin.
Drinking the night away in hope that she'd smile,
Not a solution,
But it worked for a while.
Out on the town dressed to kill,
Only sipping that drink
To wash down the pill.
Taking away the hurt.
Taking away the pain.
Nothing left to lose
Her world was lost in vain

Threw the door stumbling home with her friends
She'd never felt more alone.
She ran to her bedroom where she began to break
She was sick of pretending, Sick of being so fake.
She fell to the ground in a crying fit
and her cold tears ran over the porcelain floor.
She started screaming at God repeating over and over
I cant do this on my own anymore.'

"If you love me god, Then why is it this way?
Why am i suffering each and every single day?
Why God, Have you forgotten me?
I'm right here, Are you too blind see?"

In her last hope she took out Gods book
And scribbled these words to thee.
I have faith, In you God
But do you have faith in me?'

Mygosh, Its been over a year since ive written anything decent.
Comments/suggestions very muchly appreciated & returned.
Also, do you think this is in the right category?
Rebecca.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sora

    A wonderfully written poem! i loved every word. very detailed.
    and i think it should be in the "poems about life" catergory, under faith and religion. something of that sort. but it still fits with sad poems though. keep up the good work!

  • 18 years ago

    by Hebe

    Great poem.
    So sad.
    Good rhyming, and great word choice.
    Loved reading it.
    Take care

  • 18 years ago

    by Mo

    A very moving and powerful poem. I liked it - as a lot of other people said on here - it also made me feel like that girl - I think everyone who's had a hard time before (ie. almost everyone in existence) has cried out to "God" at some time or other in desperation.

    The only thing I could say is to watch the structure of your poem - sometimes the stanzas were four lines to a stanza and rhyming "a,b,c,b" but then other times you would string two lines together to make it a two sentence stanza with just "b,b" ... if you know what I mean?

  • 18 years ago

    by k i k i

    Thankyou for the comment :]

    You're stuff is great, moving and interesting.
    Keep it up.

    Kiki

  • 18 years ago

    by ABake

    Wow, I absolutely loved the emotion put into this poem.

    In her last hope she took out Gods book
    And scribbled these words to thee.
    I have faith, In you God
    But do you have faith in me?'

    That stanza was perfect to sum up this poem.
    You have an amazing talent.
    5/5

    _-Amber-_

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