If only

by firexdancer   Apr 16, 2007


If only i could speak the words
that open up your eyes.
the words that maybe could erase,
my hate and worthless lies.
the syllables that mean so much,
the sounds that break the ice.
each different movement of the tongue,
resulting in new life.
but the words can never seem to come,
for i can never speak,
my feelings in such syllables,
like laughter bubbling from a creek.
i can never say the way,
i feel as i fall down,
like blackness in an empty pit,
in these ravaged words i drown.
you'll never know the way i cry,
as i stand there in the light,
so happy i can touch the sun,
yet wishing it was night.
if only you could hear these words,
as i write them on this page,
because now you'll never know how i still loved you
when you locked me in this cage.
though i cannot sing these words,
they spill from pen in tears,
but when the paper blows away,
if only i could be the one who took away your fears.
if only i could give you this letter,
to tell you that you're wrong,
so if you find this in the street,
you'll know that i have gone.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like the last line and I also don't like one thing, you used -words- too many times, but the rest of it is... WOW I am in awe, really beautiful, you put your self in to this piece, it really deserves 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    The flow of this poem was outstanding, i really liked it. You push yourself extra sometimes and your poems realy shine :D

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Wow, awsome poem. Keep up the great work. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    The rhyme in this was quite fluent.
    In this I had a favourite selection of lines...
    "the syllables that mean so much,
    the sounds that break the ice.
    each different movement of the tongue,
    resulting in new life.
    but the words can never seem to come,
    for i can never speak,
    my feelings in such syllables,
    like laughter bubbling from a creek."
    I felt these lines especially were very original and the descriptions were thought provoking.
    On the line "they spill from pen in tears," (seventh line from the bottom) I think you meant "from the pen..." or "from my pen..."
    Thanks for sharing.

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    A great poem! I can't believe you're 13 years old! anyway keep writing my friend :) 5/5!

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