With The Knife I Cry

I was doing a random reading and I came to see your profile and thought I'd take a look.
This was a great write, I admit it's touched me to the depth.

Pick up a knife,
slit my wrist.
For all the bad,
that I did.
This stanza reminds me of some other stanza in another poem, I don't remember the poem but I do remember liking it a lot ;)

Don't be afraid,
to continue on.
Go deeper and deeper,
until you're gone.
This stanza was my fave, I hate to say "I can relate, I know how this feels" cuz actually everyone has gone through his own pain and no one can relate to it any single bit...But I think this one was truly touching, I do feel numb nowadays and I wish to be brave to hold the knife, but we all know it's not a good thing.
Well done on this one.

Me out of your life,
me out of your dreams,
me out of your future,
me out of your schemes.
I kinda have to criticize this stanza, I didn't really like the repetition in it, it wasn't that bad, though could've been written in a better way =]

I enjoyed this piece a lot hun, I totally love fast-paced poems, they're usually so meaningful.
Write on
Best of luck =]

Wow very good

You really have talent! Keep up the great work

Really a sweet piece.
keep it up !!!
5/5

Lina - this is a very sad poem. I hope that you are managing to get over this person as no one is worth harming yourself and putting yourself through all this for. I know that at the time you feel like its taking the pain away to do that, but please talk to someone about this - its a very real danger and I dont want to see you feel so down that you think its the only way out.

Mo

xxx