One last jump

Bloody tear drops flow
Down my cracked cheeks
As I get ready to jump
After all these painful weeks
I found the third stanza weaker
Than any of your other stanzas
It seemed force and completely
Ruined the whole flow of your poetry.
I give you a 4/5 on this one :]

Hmm, I liked it when I read it in my head but than when I read it out loud I got stuck at some parts. It was good, don't get me wrong; I did like it, but also the overall message..it was sad and powerful, but it sent out a bad vibe. I dunno, but it does happen everyday, this kind of thing, so yeahh. Good job Hun.

I like this poem alot it is very deep... i fell your pain about your mum...
xoxooxoox
-kay-

Wow, the second poem that has made me want to cry in the space of five minutes!
You write so fluidly with so much emotion in the words..
It really gets to the readers heart..
5/5
*Gem*

Its more sad then dark.
whatever.
It was a well flowed poem and I enjoyed reading it.
Hope you keep writing and improving good lcuk!