Fleo

I agree. There is definitely a lot of raw feeling behind this poem that shows somewhat but there is a lot more hidden the deeper that you look and I believe that those show when there is an understanding.

For most people this is something that they can relate to and I think that really helps the poem, though it doesn't need much help at all. The emotions are relevant and intense. I think the raw nature of the poem and its honesty are.. amazing.

It's a look into the person that you are and it gives people a glimps at who you are. Very mysterious but something and someone that I am sure people can relate to.

I think the first sentence is a major opening for the rest of the poem. It gives a bit of an open topic and then leads into specifics.

I'm kind of ranting here. Seems really off topic but I feel the need and want in the poem, the desperation... to be who you are and not drive away everyone and to also, at the same time, be someone that everyone else likes and that you might not necessarily want to be. It's a complex situation where you don't know what to do and has several different outcomes that may/may not be what you want. That definitely shows.

I like the comparison of you knowing what you could be and fearing what you could have been. There is a very fine line between the two and the last paragraph sort of shows my whole understanding.

The last sentence is a really nice close.

Powerful, filled with raw, greatly expressed emotions. I can relate to this piece. I like the way you wrote it, despite the fact that the flow is off in some places, whole poem is very original.