My drug

Awsome.. You just keep writing ok! 5/5

Thank you, I fixed it

Ok, It's easier to read a poem if you put it in Stanzas eg.

He is my drug
He is my pleasure
I squish this bug
And steal his treasure

Tears stream down my face
I realize what I have done
I retreat to my dark space
I find comfort in no one

Love is lost once again
I was blinded by fear
Put into me by many men
Rather boys too afraid to get near.

Yet I go on trusting them
My fragile heart gets broken
I become the one they condemn
I am left alone, words left soft-spoken

Also people are mor elkely to read it because it seems easier to read and more interesting.

Commas and full stops
eg.
He is my drug.
He is my pleasure.
I squish this bug,
And steal his treasure.

Tears stream down my face,
I realize what I have done.
I retreat to my dark space,
I find comfort in no one.

Love is lost once again,
I was blinded by fear.
Put into me by many men.
Rather boys too afraid to get near.

Yet I go on trusting them.
My fragile heart gets broken.
I become the one they condemn.
I am left alone, words left soft-spoken.

You ahve good rhythm and rhyme. The word condemn was very strong in this poem even though it was said only once. You should try to use more of your vocabulary.
Strong words=strong poem
Don't lose feeling in your poems either. Emotion is the main key.

And most inportantly if you're happy with your poem then tha's all that matters no matter what I or anyone says.

:)
- Emma
I hope I helped

Alright thanks for the tips

Yep I like it. It is really good worded. And I love your sentences, how they all somehow fit and so detailed. But you might want to fix the random A bits in it....but good work!!!