Toxic Passion

by Jenni Marie   May 3, 2007


I'd fallen head over heels for you
Even though I knew this was wrong
Constantly left me feeling blue
I'd fallen into toxic passion.

Always I was trying to please
Yet you never even cared
Could have been begging on my knees
I'd fallen into toxic passion.

Loving you with all my heart
Yet you didn't give a damn
Happy to tear my world apart
I'd fallen into toxic passion.

Loved you with all of my heart, body and soul
Yet you revelled and took pleasure in my pain
Tore me to pieces when once you made me whole
I'd fallen into toxic passion.

Took so long for me to get over the hurt
Remembering the happier times we had
Wondering why you treated me like dirt
I'd fallen into toxic passion.

Never again will I make the mistake
Of getting too close to someone cruel
Sometimes wondered how much I could take
I'd fallen into toxic passion.

...Never again will I fall into toxic passion.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Gem

    The repetition was a stroke of genius
    The overall tone of this poem was excellent, it really tugs on the heart of whomever is reading it.
    Well it did with me anyway, lol
    Great vocab choices
    5/5
    *gem*

  • 16 years ago

    by carissalynn

    OMG..i seriously gasped, this is totally what i am going to...not the love part, but the way i was treated, and being treated. You sshould write one about a love antidoet lol. *muah* Magnific!
    Carissa EE>

  • 16 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    The key thing that I think worked in this poem, was the repeated line 'I'd fallen into toxic passion.'. At first I didn't like it, but as it kept coming up, it grew on me very nicely. Also, I felt a lot of passion in this poem. I can't say how exactly, but I did. I hope you know me well enough now that you'll know I'm a 'truth teller'. So, heres the negative side (That by the way, I do genuinely hate to give). I think the forth stanza could stand to be a little shorter. Not much, as long as the fifth is what I'm thinking. The reason I say this, is because, in my limited experience, readers like scructure, and I think that the forth line breaks that structure. Sorry if I seem bossy or condescending, because I certainly don't mean to be.

    Brad

    P.S. I'm glad you liked the 'Kiddy Killers' poems. I tried to make it one poem, but it was too long. Thank you for you kind words.

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