Urm i dont understand the ast line lol however what i made if it was very powerful and well written :D

xxx alex xxx

Nice wording. I especially love the English/French transition...

Foray and fray seem very alike for my taste but i love that word and no one uses it so no brainer that it gets a five

It is interesting how so few words can say so much.. the unusual words give it that extra touch of mysteri in some way...
also your ending in french was a great idea ....
Good work

Lol so i had to look up like every word in this poem :]P okay not really but the first line lol

anyways about the poem.. the first two lines are really strong.. i love the way you think of things. all your poems so far are much deeper than most people can bring themselves to think.. however.. i cant comment on the last line.. because wel i dont knoe french.. but it sound pretty lol :]P

Awh, wow. That was so beautifully worded. I did not quite understand the last line as I believe you used some french in there but the other lines were great. Lovey job. 5/5

I really like this poem. But what does"desole" mean? I know "je Suis" means I am. (did a bit of French in college). Nice job..

Josie

Perfect dude, the reason im saying that this poem made me to go to dictionary to look up the meaning of your words, that is what poetry is about.
I also loved the french mixing, its just a fresh style to me........ something different.
great job
as always, a 5/5 cause you truly deserve it.

Wow loved the last line in this poem If im correct it means "im sorry" in french. Well done with this style of poetry loved your vocab. Well done~mel

Very well done! It's different in that it rhymes ...the word choices are fabulous and the English/French transition is awesome! All the best, Debbie

Beautiful. You have such a rich vocabulary, and your poems reflect that. May I ask, though, the meaning of "Je suis desole"? Just curious...
Niccely done though. I have a hard time with haikus XD
Kelsea

Good poem. But maybe you should put in ( ) what the french means:) I did like the fact that you used french. 5/5

Well it would be helpful if i could actucally understand with this is saying.. and i dont feel like looking it up.. lol maybe you could send me a messege telling me what it means..

This was beautifully written, and though short filled with so much depth.
I liked how you swapped langauages, I thought it made the poem powerful, and I thought the ending was very intense.

I dont understand the last line, but it was short and has meaning behind it

I think this is great. good structure and flow. it was very powfully worded. great work keep it up. 5/5

The first haiku i've seen on this site, way to keep independent buddy

your servant:
david

And I wish I could properly critic this..but, I don't know what it says.
May I suggest putting the english underneath it? It would help a lot of readers that won't admit they don't understand.

But, I'll give it to you, it sounds pretty, and by the way you write, I'm sure it is. =]

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex No Rate [Until I know what it means. Lol.]

I think of trees on this one.
I have no idea what you just said, though.
Lol.
But I also see lovers.
Talking in french.
My conscious starts to fray...
Lovers falling in love
falling asleep as well.
I never noticed.
But people should talk about feelings more
In their comment
And less about flows, grammar, spelling, blah.
Thank you for opening my eyes on this one :]

Very good
i love hiaku it is difficult but always lovely when your done
5/5
oh about the french: i'd put a subtitle type thing beneath it