Papercut

by firexdancer   May 6, 2007


Too deep to hurt,
yet too painful to ignore,
i try to forget,
but there's blood on my floor.

screaming inside,
but mouth swollen into a smile,
i sing a song,
cause i know I'll be here awhile.

it stings and it burns,
like fire among us,
but don't worry at all,
i won't make a fuss.

if you see me lie here,
just laugh and walk away,
because some things are just too fast to see,
and for a mistake you will pay.

I'm shattering inside,
a heart of broken glass,
yet with each new strike,
the pain starts to pass.

as I've told you before,
my mouth is swollen shut,
so with my hands i write,
my last paper cut.

^i know this isn't very good, so i would really love it if you vote: to give me ideas of how to make it better, thanks
love
gabriella

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  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah

    A wonderful poem. It's perfect, not bad. It was dark, deep and very well written. Great Job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This poem was pretty good. I thought it could of been just a touch better proberly because it was too simple for me therefor not holding enough emotions. The tpic you used was great though but the flow was off for me in most places. Overall not bad. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Well, to be honest this isn't a bad poem but I know that you can write a lot better. It is maybe too simple, you can use some metaphor to describe the emotions stronger.

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    This is good, i think your flow was a little of after the third stanza but still you captured an idea and expressed it. Words are so easy for you lol, i envy you.

    xxx alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by repair her heart

    Woah.....great flow.....so in depth it just captures you and takes you in.great job

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