Planet Love

by Startle Me   May 8, 2007


Her first day on a brand new planet,
Unconvinced she has ever arrived.
World has been well-known for years
Yet only a few survived and thrived

See, the woman arrived on planet love,
One of the most infamous worlds of all.
None but the members know its existence;
To fall in love, she does not recall.

The Gods were not nice to this woman.
She fell in love to the same sex gender.
The eyes and the smile to fall in love with,
Fight, she could not, could only surrender.

The feelings felt were incredible,
To her, they were heavenly, divine.
Heart beating faster each second.
Her body was jell-o without a spine.

For right now, the woman is clueless
Of the emotions she has inside of her.
For she is lost in the planet of love,
Where the magic and love occurs.

**I really, really dislike this poem. But for some reason, I don't want to delete it. Sigh**

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  • 16 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    I think that this line "Yet only a few survived and thrived" disrupts the flow because the rhyme within the line

    besides that it was an okay poem.. i didnt love it.. the idea of planet love just wasnt very interesting to me.. however the flow and rhyme scheme was fine other than the one part i already pointed out

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    The Gods ware not nice to this woman.
    She fell in love to the same sex gender.
    The eyes and the smile to fall in love with,
    Fight, she could not, could only surrender."
    ^^Love these lines..the word choice was good n the flow perfect!

    .it's a wonderful write...lol...yeah u r rite certainly not your best!..but good job though!xxPoojaxx

  • 16 years ago

    by Mousie

    Good poem i enjoyed it, thought it was truly well written. great job, keep up the good writing

  • 17 years ago

    by skynerraw

    I'm glad you didn't delete it, its a great poem, you did a wonderful job, the flow was great, and a great word choice :D Great poem!

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    You wrote it, be proud to post it. I think you did a good job, but like you said not your best. Eh we all have poems like that. The flow was good, the word choice was great, but ti was alittle dry on the emtions. Anyway still i give you 4/5. keep up the good work.

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