Comments : Staccato Memories

  • 15 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great poem. It has a nice flow to it. The only problem I could see was that it is short. But I did like it. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Makes one think. Short but brillant. the word choice was excellent, the flow was good, dare to be diffrent for that 5/5 you deserve nothing less.

  • 15 years ago

    by Narphangu

    Haha, I loved it!

    Awesomely out there...
    But perfect in that it just keeps one trying to understand.
    I love how you ended it... Great job, definitely 5/5 from me!

  • 15 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    I thought it was very good, i had to read it a few times to completley understand it, but its truly a good poem, 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Hmmm.. Ive read this a few times and I cant really understand the meaning of it.. so because of that I cant really give you a comment.. I'm REALLY sorry.

  • 15 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    This poem is interesting, to say the least. Very intruguing, the line about Rosencrantz throws it off...causes you to think, which I like. Not many people are going to remember these characters from Hamlet, which is cool that you included references to these characters. Definitely 5/5 from me.

  • 15 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    The poem is just great...very very beautiful..perfect...incredible..amazing..lol... what not!!...i love this 1....the word choice is just perfect and i really don't knw hw u can just so easily put in so much of power and beauty to a short poem...Amazing write!!
    5/5 easy:-)

    xxPoojaxx

  • 15 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    All i can say is wow. i've never read a poem like this. way to keep the individuality up

    your servant:
    david

  • 15 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I don't like the last line, but again, you kept me interested until the end. Nicely done. There's not much more to say, sorry. =/

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 15 years ago

    by seymour

    Very complex, had to read twice^.^

  • 15 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I pictured a half man with everyone staring at him.
    Only with chimes all around.
    I don't know what your other words meant.
    From the picture I just described.
    It was kind of freaky
    A person that's different... half man-half machine
    With everyone staring at him.
    He feels awkward.
    I don't know.
    Sometimes I kind of feel like him.
    I probably interpreted yours wrong :[
    My dear,
    I love your beginning.
    Although I didn't understand most of it.

  • 15 years ago

    by Courtney Lang

    I loved this poem.
    it was fabulous.
    there was good flow and it made me want to keep reading it.
    also, it seemed i was able to relate.

  • 15 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Your work really does remind me of the beginings of books. I want to write, produce, and direct some day and I think you'd be a good author. 5.

  • 15 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Another fine written piece by you, I really like your choice of words.. And again.. I wish you made it longer.. Nonetheless a good read. Keep up the good work.

  • 15 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Now this, this piece was interesting. I love poetry that has to make me think and this poem does just that. It is not spelt right out infront of me so that from the first line I know exactly what is going on it keeps me interesting wanting to know whats going on. Vocab was stunning I must say I truely love the way you write. This poem was definitly not cliched it reminded me of being uncomfortable with myself for some reason. Overall well done a 5/5 from me. ~Mel

  • 15 years ago

    by Nix

    It is very interesting, I like the idea but I don't really understand what this poem means to you. Few lines are very effective and you wrote short piece but you still managed to create powerful atmosphere, with just a few words, that is really impressing. Anyway, I like it very much, words that you used are superbly picked. I enjoyed in every line, this piece has some special tone that makes it excellent. Well done!

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very interesting poem, the flow and structure where both very well. I liked your choice of words and the way it was all put together to make a short to the point peice of art. Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by ghosts in bloom

    I simply love the way you wrote this.
    Thought provoking, unique, strong.
    Worth reading again, and gathering
    a new viewpoint, this is a flexible
    piece to me. Wonderfully done.

    Write On!
    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • 15 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Half man half machine,
    You'd think I was the one who invented silence.
    [[F-cking amazing. I love these lines; it sounds just like what I would write. ^^]]

    Static slides across the television,
    Reminds me of your wind chime voice.
    [[Again.. I love it. The random (but it fits) description is so capturing . . . ]]

    Dire dreams, of my life...
    Or lack there of.
    [[A little humor? I like it . .]]

    Rosencrantz & Guildenstern are dead.
    [[I'm not going to lie, I do not know who these people are . . ]]

    Thus.
    You should PM me and explain that to me.

    From what I could read and understand, however, I really enjoyed the poem. I loved your metaphors and descriptions; they were creative and definately not cliche. Keep it up.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very unique feel to this. Good write, not great though I thought it could be better. Your use of wording was good. Keep it up.

    Peace, Joe