Heartache and Pain

by Hidden Feelings within these Words   May 13, 2007


Why do I feel like my life is falling apart?
I feel as if someone has shattered my heart.
I'm the eldest, so my sisters want to follow me.
Am I setting a good example like I should be?

I'm not perfect, I've done my fair share of wrong.
But I have the LORD on my side, to help keep me strong.
Can someone please tell me why they're going that way?
The path of doom, where one day they'll have to pay..

I've done it all, the cutting, the drugs and such.
So, I know what they're going through just as much.
It starts small, and gradually grows bit by bit.
It's a disease, once started you cannot quit..

How can I cut them off on this path they're going down?
And keep them from the heartache all the way around.
I try my hardest to keep them sheltered from this pain..
But now I'm afraid their hearts they've permanently stained.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Jim McMillen the man within

    Ally my sweet friend , you are a treasure to all who know you! You care so deeply and you give so much to all in need.
    Just keep giving guidance to those in need and when it is their time to understand. they will come to know the true depths of its meaning. Always remember:---- If nobody gives of themselves, then emptiness abounds-- --beautiful poem sweetie 5/5...JIM

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    I loved this poem a great deal, the best poem I think you have done from what I read. The message was wonederful and it made you think of your own life. But The biggest lesson would have to be, to leave others to thier own destiny. You may suggest what to do but in the end its thier own decision. Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    an awesome poem, I like the second stanza and especially the first line of that stanza: I'm not perfect, I've done my fair share of wrong..
    keep up the good work 5/5
    kisses stephanie

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    Aww so loving sister you are. Flow was great and loved the emotions you have put in it. I can relate to it also.Sad but an amazing write! 5/5 Keep up the great work! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I really liked the meaning you portayed throughout this poem the emotions were great and i think you showed them well. The one thing i have to say though is i found your word ryhmes too commen if that makes sense, like ryhming "be" with "me" i think if you expanded the words it would make this poem much more interesting to read but i cannot vote low for something like that when i enjoyed this poem alot. well done~mel

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