Love and Negotiation {Trijan Refrain}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 13, 2007


This is a poem about God creating people that whine and he finally tells him to shut and "no negotiation". The Narrator is God, by the way.
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For love and negotiation,
Open her eyes to light.
Make more to your own creation,
Make her perfect; just right.
Set her on earth; wonder about,
Look at hands, "They aren't real!" You doubt.
...Set her on earth.
....Set her on earth.
Test those new lips and learn to pout.

"I want this, I [need] that," you scream;
Press your hands to your eyes.
"This isn't like Eden, it seems."
Oh, just shut up and cry.
"I may regret what I create;"
"If you shh, I'll negotiate.
....I may regret.
....I may regret.
If you don't hush, I'll end your fate.

"Now listen here," my deep voice boomed,
"You are my creation."
"You'll listen close or you are doomed;"
"No negotiation."
With that final, the people fled;
"I'm the Creator," I laughed instead.
....With that final.
....With that final.
"No negotiation," I said.
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Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8

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  • 17 years ago

    by Biscuit

    Some really good rhyming in this one and the flow is flawless. the line 'no negotiation' is very short and this emphasises it.
    i like how the opening line says 'for love and negotiation'.. and then the last line is 'no negotiation'. To me, this shows how He created her 'for love and negotiation' but then she wanted more and more and more so he changed his mind.
    this is a great depiction of the world and how people always want what they cant have. well written :)

    kim xx