Just Like a Firefly {Double La'Tuin}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 17, 2007


Press on ointment, though you will still cry;
Stopped breathing seems to be your lungs.
Do not worry, it will be all right,
I'll take care of you, Firefly.

The problem is your small light did die,
And no longer can you feel the rungs.
The latter's slipping without a fight;
I'll catch you, but can't let you fly.

Sooth your sad heart; do not you dare die,
You may be hurt; you can have my lungs,
I know it's frightening, but hold on tight,
One day again you will soon fly.

I know you are frustrated, but don't sigh;
Speak to me in your native tongue,
For you're doing completely all right,
Today is the day you can fly.

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Twinkle, twinkle, can you hear that sigh?
Firefly is back on his rungs,
He didn't give up without a fight,
And just him you too can fly.

Your friends do worry when you sigh,
It frightens them and stops their tongue.
They are truly scared when you don't fight,
Yet by yourself you'll learn to fly.

"I know it hurts," says Firefly,
But soon you'll get air in your lungs,
You will shimmer one day, very bright,
By help from friends -- hold your head high.

It takes courage to hold yourself high,
Even though drowning are your lungs;
So take this time, it's worth it to fight,
Tonight is not your time to die.

Twinkle, twinkle, can you hear that sigh?
Firefly is back on his rungs,
He didn't give up without a fight,
And just him you too can fly.
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A strict syllable count of 9/8/9/8 is required per stanza
'abca, abca' rhyme scheme that is consistent throughout each stanza

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  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    This was cute :]
    I love La`Tuins, so the double was a bonus for me, haha. I did notice a few things though...

    "Sooth your sad heart; do not you dare die," 'sooth' should be 'soothe' , and the other part would flow better if 'do not you' was 'don't you' .

    That's all that I caught on to, great job Darling!

    5.5
    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Ahh.
    Finally.
    I missed this.
    Lol.
    I'll take care of your firefly.
    That was very emotional for me.
    I saw a firefly almost dying.
    And this little girl trying to tend it.
    It was... weird.
    Rungs?
    Umm... In the dictionary I found that it
    Was like
    A past thing for rings.
    Do you have the right word?
    Third stanza?
    Effing mazing.
    Giving your heart to a firefly?
    AHHH!
    That's original bay-beee
    I get the poem.
    I believe it's actually quite deep.
    People worry when you're sad
    Some will give their heart to you.
    So brighten up that firefly light.
    Or something like that.
    I love this.
    How long did it take you to make?
    It seemed like an extremely hard poem.
    5/5, dearest :]