Hell

by 111308   May 21, 2007


I'm ruined
And hurt
Desperate to be somebody I'm not
Confused
And I'm in love
Please bring him back to me
So I need help from above?
He's my joy can't you see?
He's the only one for me
Take me back
I promise I'll be good
Everything will be fine
He really misunderstood
I'm going through pain
I'm feeling the torture
I get now
Come back before I rupture
I love him can't you tell?
Please come back baby
I really don't want to live through this life of pure hell..

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  • 13 years ago

    by Monica AKA Mika

    Yea i felt like that when my ex broke up with me but you need to remember that everything happens for a reason and i guess that was supposed to happen...But i love the way you flowed with it and i just love the way you use your words in your writting 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Kaila

    Very nice vocabulary
    it hurts to know someone feels this way though
    because I know how you feel
    I've been there and done that
    and think your an amazing poet
    5/5
    from kaila

  • 13 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Some of your lines are pretty random.
    They're not all that consistent.
    For example:
    At the very beginning of your poem,
    You're talking about
    Being hurt and ruined
    Next thing you know
    You're talking about a guy.
    That's a humongous jump for me.
    I thought it would be cliched.
    Just because of your beiginning.
    But somehow, you made it not be.
    I don't know.
    Maybe your usage of words?
    Other than that.
    It was alright.
    It wasn't the best I've read in this whole
    Poem site.
    It also wasn't the worst.
    And believe me.
    I've read a lot worse than this.
    4/5 dearest?