by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex May 27, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
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"Are you lonely?" He turned her to ask. |
by Brittany C
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1st stanza "He turned her to ask." maybe try "He turned to her to ask." It just sounds better and reads better. |
by Teria
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Hmm. I like it, a lot. |
by aDORKable x3
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This poem actually made me go 'Aww' at the end. It is sad but at the sametime, made me feel a little hopeful. I loved the fact that this didn't rhyme because it made it seem so much more realistic. It was very well done and the repetition again was great! :] |