Usually I wouldn't of liked how the first two lines both ryhmed with the same word "It" but I belive you acutally pulled this off so well done for that. The emotions were portrayed nicely throughout this i enjoyed reading the poem alot and found the two line stanzas to be effective. Well done~mel

Aww this was so beautiful. I loved the last stanza. So emotional. Awesome work. Xx Chrissie

Beautiful owrk....u've penned deep n true emotions into this one...so wonderfully n i can relate to this one too..lol...most of the time...there is so much a smile can hide...so true..
Great write!
Well done
5/5=)
xxPoojaxx

The last two lines were very powerful to me, I think a lot of people wear a smile even though they aren't happy. If we see somebody who's always smiling it never occurs to us that there lives might not be as perfect as they make it look. Excellent job 5/5

Very sad, but yet so powerfully spooken.. very good becasue I was able to see the image.. I just dont understand why people would down vote this one.. well good job and keep up the good work.. ur a amzing writer keep it up!

I almost I cried right there! This poem only reminded me of my friend who was sent...somewhere...5/5

Aww this is sad..and heartfelt....i think it flowed nicely.. and i can relate a little to this poem...

nice job. 5/5 keep it up hun.

Woah..i can relate to this one..every word on it..gj 5/5..

Very sad... but so meaningful...
wish i could write poem like this lol ^^

5/5

Love the rhyme, especially in this stanza:

"You think it's all just perfect.
And that's how I prefer it."

The first of your sad poems that I've read and I love it just as much as your happy ones! Flow, structure, rhyme, rhythm all spot on. But what else could I expect?! 5/5

Em xXx

This poem was short and to the point. I really enjoyed it. The only problem, was there was a little bit of flow problems in the middle. Other than that, I enjoyed it and still gave it a 5/5! [:

These are a very powerful bit of words you've written. I think most would be able to relate. The whole poem had pretty good flow, except for the first two lines...

I'm sad but you don't know it.
I'm angry but won't show it.

^^^I think to keep flow, you might want to make sure your adding your commas, so that the reader knows where to pause for effect.

I'm angry(comma) but I'll never show it
I'm sad (comma) but you'll never know it.

I changed the first two lines a bit when I added in the comma's, because you seem to be switching tenses a lot, and it seems that the future tense would emphasize your point a little better. Just a suggestion though. Other wise this piece is heart wrenching, and beautiful all at the same time...Not an easy combination for any poet. 5/5

Very storng....and applies to many people in this world.

Wow! Fanstastic! The flow is perfect, everything rymes perfectly, perfect! I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!! I would give it a hundred if I could, but since I can't, I'll give it a five!!!!!!!