Dusty

by Chloe   May 28, 2007


My heart has been emptied with force
leaving nothing to feel
I'm a ghost that has nothing to live for
fallen from the sky
these bruises they burn
and my skin is turning gray
take this hand that is lonely and cold
will you hold me tight like you did back then
not a care in the world, just you and me
but now I'm feeling so dry
without no one to call and depend on
my shoulders getting dusty from sitting in this spot
I've been here since forever
and i believe I'm losing my touch
I'm forgetting what its like to feel your skin
the softness of your face brushing mine
take me back and dust me off
like an old book sitting on the shelf
I've been left alone and not looked at for so long
can i be opened up and filled in with love
since I'm not much of anything now
you take me with you where ever you go
just lead the way from this dusty place.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Ash

    Not your best. But i did like it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I agree it was deep. but I found it rather intresting, and even though there didn't seem to be much of a flow to it, flow isn't everthing, the emtions were strong, and the message to me was clear. I have to give it a 5/5 Honestly

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I didn't find a neither a fow nor a beat in this one.
    It was just... without structure.
    Try to add some punctuation in your work.
    They really do help.

    Your first line?
    I think you should reword that.
    It just sounds funny.
    I mean, I know what you're talking about.
    But some other people might not
    And be clueless about it.
    Explain more of it.

    Other than that.
    It was okay.
    Not the best I've read.
    But it WAS pretty deep.
    4/5?