Hypocrite

This was great!

I really enjoyed this poem, it kind of reminded me of my relationship with my mother.

I really enjoyed this poem, it kind of reminded me of my relationship with my mother.

Uh, yeah...okay there something about it that I kinda liked but at the same time there was something working against it. I like the last stanza. The flow was a little off now and then because of some of the wording. It's actually interesting though.
~Faith-less

Always seeming to be looking
for something to accuse you of
[[I like those lines.]]

Why would you want to do that?
You're skinny enough already.
[[I'm not sure why, but I also liked these lines. They stuck out to me...they had meaning; I could <feel> what you wanted me to, I guess.]]

Don't look at me like done
something unbecoming to you.
[[I'm thinking you messed up this line. I liked where you were going, though, I think.
I'd like to read it
"Don't look at me;
It's unbecoming on you."
Something like that? Yeah.]]

I didn't really like it, but I could <feel> the emotion in it, which is important. It may not be your best write, but we all have to vent.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5