Alone

by Reminders Torture   Jun 8, 2007


She walks alone in the street.
no-one to dry her tears.
or calm her present fears.

she is looking for a place.
she remembers how she laughed.
her happiness that once lived.

her beauty is so vast.
all she ever wanted,
was for the things to last.

now she walks alone,
in this dark and lonely street.
with no light to guide her way.

she is alone,the flames burn inside.
alone inside the broken heart.
alone drench in the rain of pain.

alone she runs with the burning torch.
pushing the night,towards
the light for dawning the night.

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  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    Kk two things; first shes walking, then running - whether or not thats supposed to have meaning, it seems to elevate the pace or the poem, like shes almost getting desperate, or maybe more hopeful. second thing:the part about vast beauty, i would change to vast sadness, or regret or longing, or change the word vast; it seems like you're trying too hard to rhyme. same with "rain of pain" - it sounds a bit like in my fair lady where shes like "the rain in spain falls mainly on the plain."sorry just thought of that anyway, i like it a lot (the lonely little girl is endearing) but a few tiny changes might make it a bit better

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