The Voices that Betray Me

by dollwithafrown   Jun 12, 2007


I've never really been the kind
Of person to be so naive;
Any insults sent their way,
They would instantly believe.

Yet somehow, some way,
Along the line I travelled,
My mind was lost, my thoughts changed
And hidden fears became unravelled.

"You're so ugly, you're so fat,
Why would anyone fall for you?"
Their taunting words of abuse,
I instantly thought as true.

I thought the voices would guide me,
Offer me reassurance, like a friend,
Yet all those constant thoughts did,
Was help me near my end.

They were like a curse in my head,
Leaking that constant evil breath,
And ultimately all they did for me
Was lead me towards the door of death.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Ohhh that ending...I frikken love that ending!
    Intense stunning and hard hitting.
    The opening was powerful, and from there on it just got better.
    The only suggestion I would have for this is try and eliminate some of the fillers, to the make the flow absolutely flawless.
    Other than that, perfect.

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Its pretty good, Flow was good for me. I really like the last stanza! well done. And I love the title of the poem! The vocab was great.

    5/5!

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