Brave Smile

by katy   Jun 18, 2007


I put on a brave smile,
The world is none the wiser,
My soul plummets into a deep abyss,
I look up and just smile at passers by,

Today i felt lonley,
Today i felt torn apart,
Today i felt confused,
Today i felt depressed,

I put on a brave smile,
No one really knows how i feel,
I want to tell someone,
I dont know how to,

I put on a brave smile,
I secretly cry in the corner on my room,
Everyone thinks i am cheerful,
If you looked into my soul,
You would see a broken girl,

Today i felt lonley,
Today i felt torn apart,
Today i felt confused,
Today i felt depressed,

I put on a brave smile,
Underneath this thin layer i am distressed and unhappy,
Please someone come and save me,
This girl is calling out for help,

I carry on my life as usual putting on a brave smile for the world.

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I hope you enjoyed my poem, let me know what you thought, thank you xx

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  • 16 years ago

    by Connie

    Katy,

    This is very well written ~ I enjoy reading your poems because they are written with such feeling, and about very real things we face in our lives.

    Nice job!

    Connie

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina Yap

    Many people never realize that the one that smiles the most usually is the one that undergoes the most pain, like myself. Only the people that truly know me, knows im hurt. A friend once told me he respects me because behind my beautiful smile is all the hurt, and that is wat this poem was about, BRAVE SMILE.. I trully like this piece, here's a tip tho

    I felt that if you wrote

    Today i felt lonely,

    I felt torn apart,
    confused,

    Today i felt depressed,

    rather than:
    Today i felt lonley,
    Today i felt torn apart,
    Today i felt confused,
    Today i felt depressed,

    This poem would be stronger. But it was still great, Dont stop writing

  • 16 years ago

    by kristen

    This is especially a good poem because their is a ton of people that could relate.. and like the other one it's something that alot of people can understand. it twas a beutiful poem lol

  • 16 years ago

    by Prophecies In Kodak

    Your poems seem to go up and down with your style, but lack of rhyme suited this more. i enjoyed the 'today i...' stanza. rating; 5

  • 16 years ago

    by Mary Walker

    I related with brave smile, it is something alot of people can relate to. 5/5

    your friend,
    Mary

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