Good poem i liked it alot keep it up
carly

Aww this is so sad!
great poem!
well penned
5/5
xox Jess

"You think I am breathing
You think I am fine
But inside I am gasping
And losing my mind"

i loved those lines! you are great poet, keep up the good work! <3
5/5

This poem has a great flow and hits its dark mark. I believe most can relate to the poem and a times that we have focused on the tunnel rather than a light at the end 5/5

Ok, again another great one by you. but in the last stanza "blacked" was a word you wouldnt think would fit, but it rhymed so it doesnt matter!!!5/5

Wow. I can relate to this poem too.... Great job!! 11/10!!!

The simple and beautiful consecutive rhymes are really catching in this piece. I liked your wordings and style of writing. Its well penned and well flowing. 5/5 u deserve. Tc

With love
Fsams

Excellent form and meter...well written :)

I really love the way you write. Touches deep inside. I even cried inside. just very touching for me. This one flowed really good. Powerful. Lots of emotions in this so readers mind is easyly catched. Simply amazing!
Keep writing! 5/5

Gosh.. this is excellent =]] really like it.. very deep feelings expressed very well
great work
5/5
.x

I thought this was very good also. My fave part of this one was...

You think I am breathing
You think I am fine
But inside I am gasping
And losing my mind

This part also flowed very well. Your a very good author keep up the wonderful work. 5/5

We really should live each day to the fullest because we never know when the end will come and it might be to late. Fantastic job once again 5/5 GG23

You think I am breathing
You think I am fine
But inside I am gasping
And losing my mind
`Beautiful stanza.

The vocabulary was simple, but your words really stuck out there and just pokes the reader in the face (: Nicely done .
..__MiNDYY

A very very powerfully worded poem. I thought the flow was very good, it wasn't super long, nor super short. I loved the feeling. Very well done.

Thats a pretty good poem, keep it up :D

Another great poem.i liked this one too.your a great writer.keep it up.

This one i loved as well.
you're really an amazing writter

And again another well penned poem. I really like your style in writing. I can feel the emotions in your poem. Flow was good.

5/5! :D

Emotions in this poem are greatly expressed, and the choice of words is good, too.
Flow is excellent, from the beginning to the end.
My favorite stanza is:
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My vision is dying
All I see now is blacked
The look on my dead face
The loving I lacked -

Well done, truly an amazing work, 5/5

Wow this poem is great. Your vocab is truly amazing. I love your work. Topic is excellent and you wrote this peace superbly.
Well done 5/5