Comments : Intoxicated Beauty

  • 12 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    WOW that was so sad and so descriptive so much depth so much emotion 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

  • 12 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    Good job, I cant really find anything wrong with this poem.. Your really good at writting them and you use very good vocab. I will give you a 5/5. Great job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    WOW< that was a really emotional poem
    i loved how you worded it, it
    as great
    and it flowed
    perfectly

    you have a wide vocabulary
    good job
    and keep it up

    a well deserved

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Debbie

    Tighten up the lines, in order to augment the flow. Other than that, I actually find this piece quite beautiful and emotive; in fact, I adored how you've portrayed a teardrop, "...full of thousand emotions
    all trapped inside clear crystal cage". 'twas fairly vivid and satirical as well. :) Nicely done. ~Marian

  • 12 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I loved the emotion portrayed throughout this piece but as Debbie (Marian) said some lines could be tightened to make the flow much better. the way you portrayed a tear drop I agree with Deb so beautiful I loved that part and I truely felt the emotions pouring from this poem. Well done on creating such a beautiful piece. ~mel

  • 12 years ago

    by jason

    Another 5/5 you are a really great poet way better then me haha well yeah i have to say im a little jealous lol but yeah your a really great poet

  • 12 years ago

    by Brittany

    This poem was really amazing. Very descriptive and clear. It was easy to see the images you were describing and you're vocabulary is awesome. Those words give it a unique twist.
    Well done.

  • 12 years ago

    by FallenGrace

    Wow.

    this is absolutley awesome, it really made me feel peace in the first few stanzas and then a sharp pain in the fourth, amazing writing
    xxx
    thanks for the comment btw =]

  • 12 years ago

    by Mo

    This was very different and I could picture it all happening as you tell the story. Great wording and good idea for a poem. However, I would just suggest you read through it again as there are a few minor words missing here and there that could make it flow a bit easier.

    Liked it a lot.

    Mo

  • 12 years ago

    by Marius Laun

    It is dark and sad. It was wonderful, It was incredibly descriptful, It painted a clear picture and the emotion was strong, It was a great piece, 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by SuicideQueen

    This poem has such devotion and passion, can really feel it jump out of the page.. well screen! lol. very beautiful 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by GretaInsideOut

    Beautiful Imagery, you are very talented,
    "How I loved it dear,
    loved every moment you kill me. "

    - Sad words, easy to relate to
    Keep It Up

  • 12 years ago

    by Nix

    Very very deep... Very powerful ending, it was effective. I love your style of writing, you always create amazing atmosphere.
    Well done! 5/5